Final Draft | Article

Final Draft | Article

If you want to see the final draft of the article analysed please see Evaluation Question One

Here is my final draft of my article.  Overall I am happy. I find the article itself funny and mildly intriguing. I can relate to the artist, and my target audience can relate to him too. In fact In my opinion the artist is a part of the target audience, the way he looks (pose - being aggressive and intimidating) (facial expression- Mildly happy but with confidence).  If I had any regrets with my Article page it would be just to tweak the image a slight bit, to give that intimidating edge. I would possibly have more in the actual article, but at the same time, I feel it's good quality article. Well at least that was the sort of feedback I was getting of my target audience feedback. one example "a really witty article and a interesting persona".  This gives me confidence that the double page spread is something to be proud of.

The little tweaks between the final and last drafts include:

The font used for the Article Splash has changed giving the article a vintage feel. This is something that I've always tried to integrate to the project. The font size has shrunk a little as before the Article Splash was covering the chin, this was something that I wasn't happy with. The text cells in the article have been changed so now they are longer. I felt that the article's lines were slightly off and I extended them. This now means that the article is taking up ever so slightly more than it did in the previous draft. I also did this because some of the long words/sentences were getting cut onto the next line which can disturb the reading patterns.

Third Draft | Article

Third Draft | Article

Since the second draft a lot of changes have happened they go as follows:

1, A new photo has been inserted into the left hand page - basically finishing the pages. I feel this new photo shows the model depicting his confidence that he has shown in his previous photos, this shows the magazine is consistent.

2,A red border is going around the photo- this emphasises the photo and makes it more eye-catching. This was a tough choice, some may see it as "overkill" but for me you can never stop attracting the target audience, as the red border would appeal to them as its it symbolises danger and excitement,

3, Both pages have had new numbers put on them. Number 67 & 68 consecutively - This again gets rid of the previous draft error. This now means  that those two pages are finally back-to-back.

4, "WORDS: TOBY HOWELL" PORTRIAT "GLENN WILLIAMS" - this again adds to the realism of the pages. This is often seen in real articles showing the level of realism I've strived for.

The things that I intend to change:

1, I want to ensure that the model's face is visible something that isn't completely happening at the moment, because of the Article Splash. This is something that we'll have to change

2, This time I want to get rid of the "Will Kearse Exclusive"  box the font is too stretched and the positioning very poor

My current viewpoint on the current draft of the Article is good. There are changes that I want to make but excluding those. I starting to like the photo, it's growing on me. Having spell checked and re-read the article a few times, I'm really like the article. It is the third draft meaning there isn't much more time left at all, so those changes I do intend to make will have to be quickly.

Second Draft | Article

Second Draft | Article

Not a lot of alterations have taken place for this draft however they go as follows:

1, Both pages have a black background, with red/white wording - This has been done to experiment with the colouring, I prefer the black background suggests a dark story lurks in the article. The experiment was worth taking as I realised I think I'll go with that colour/

2, On the left hand side page where the image will be. I have put a copy of the magazine's brand logo on the top right corner of that page. Branding was a big part of my magazine research and I found that the best music magazines promote their brand an awful lot around their magazine, this something I'm trying to replicate. The branding here though I have been starting to feel maybe to big. that the photo maybe obscured. That cant happen, so the branding there will have to be taken into consideration. On another note I have started to take photos of a young male model, the one in my Front Cover and Contents page

3, On the bottom of the right page is a white boxed page number, I will need to edit that either out or better. This cant remain as if did, it could ruin the whole project.

It really is too early on to say whether I'm liking the look of the Article at this point in time. Its forming into what I had in mind which is comforting. I love the article and I really this could do well, there are a lot of positives, but like every project it has it's flaws (the random number at the bottom of the article page)

First Draft | Article

First Draft | Article

After approximately two hours this is the first draft of my Music Magazine Article page. My first ever intentions with the article page was to have a doubled paged article with one page occupied with the interview/article and the other A4 page with a one big photo close up of the model's face. This is a big inspiration through Future PLC's Total Film however, I cant use that directly as my inspiration as it isn't a Music Magazine.

So my first page of the article is empty except from the wording "Will Kearse is hitting the big time and he's taking some punches" This Article Splash is trying to suggest that he may in the big time, but he's had to pay the price". I feel this would be a fairly seducing of the article as the readers would want to know at what price did his career cost him? I feel it's a fairly attractive Splash.

At this point in time it doesn't look that impressive, however I have the following targets:

1, By the next draft I should have a pretty good idea of the image we are to use on the left page.
2, Decidedly say whether anymore changes are needed for the actual article.

Final Draft | Contents Page

Final Draft | Contents Page

To view the Analysis of my final draft of my Contents page (along with all the other finished pages) please go to Evaluation Question One.

Here is my very final draft of my contents page:

 This draft sees a new font for the Pull-Quote. A new glittery effect on the "THIS MONTH" bar. This symbolises the artist's mind - special.  The "THE INTERVIEW" box has a new white stroke effect . This is meant to show everything has a sliver lining.  Not a lot of changes mainly due to the page being consistent.  This is without a doubt a my favoured draft of the Contents page, Teasing you in to the Article and then delivering what every contents page does - a directory.  My favoured part of this draft has to be the photo so many conations (all explained in Evaluation Question One)

If there were anything however, I could have put in it would be more features on the contents list, this would show how diverse my magazine could have been. I probably would have dressed the model up in a similar hoodie to the one he wears on the front cover, as this coat doesn't really depict my target audience. I would have maybe got some effects in the right and page to maybe make it look prettier and more desired

Third Draft | Contents Page

Third Draft | Contents Page

One change has occurred since the last draft:   

Added feature to feature list - "THE INTERVIEW" a official  mention of the article. This again adds to the realism as real music magazines mention every feature they have. The bold font shows it's importance to the magazine, showing the feature's "headline" status.

My views on this current Contents page remain strong, however I will admit, it is fairly simple. This is something that has got me thinking to whether any subsidiary images would be beneficial for the lone page. I do admire the simplistic nature of the page.

However, I realise that wont get me a high grade. The possibilities of change to this page remain open.

Recently looking at the progress and quality of this particular page, I 've considered starting the whole page over, from nothing. But I decided to stick with my current page. In light of saying all of starting from fresh business, it would leave with minimal time to get the best possible grade I could get starting over. That isn't a risk, I'm prepared to take.   I have ideas to mix up the reverse page with the photo on to see if any Photoshop effects could be beneficial for the photo/page.


Targets for next draft:

1, Maybe (if it feels right) edit the photo on opposite page. See if any effects on Photoshop look good on the photo - The possibility of editing the photo to look really professional will always be "on the table".

Second Draft | Contents Page

Second Draft | Contents Page

A lot of adjustments have been made in the second draft. These include The "APRIL 2014" just below "FEATURES" to inform the reader that its the "April" issue.  The colouring of the red and black "CONTENTS" has conations with danger - something that my target audience find exciting. The feature list has been expanded. It includes the "foo-fighters". They're segment would be very good for addressing my target audience with a funny and correct mode of address. The use of "Conquer" is a very masculine word (and as my magazine's readership is approx. 70% males, it would appeal to them). The other features include a detailed feature on "the rise and fall" of the Bay City Rollers. This would be good for my target audience, who admire the old classics, as well as addressing modern day music.

The other major addition to the page is the Footer bar which reads "The Mix - Subscribe now at www.themix.com" This is a great addition to the page. After doing a lot of page analysis I found that all the best magazines have a multi-platforming world away from the magazine. This brings success to the brand, by expanding it's readership, giving the magazine exposure. The "subscribe now" is to try to  lodge the thought of subscribing to the magazine into the reader's head so they actually do, subscribe to the magazine.

There has been a very minor touch, that being the feature's number font has been changed,  now they seem more formal and professional.

The biggest development of this draft is the edition of a new page, a page dedicated to promoting a feature in the magazine. The Picture itself will be analysed in a evaluation question in the near future. The new page enables the contents page to be bigger and expand rather than keep all of it's features in a concise space - and thus adding to the page's professionalism.

On the new page there is a "THIS MONTH" bar notifying the reader the date of the issue. Then to the right is a another title-bar "Specials" presents exclusivity, that would you are about to read is "special" and you cant find it anywhere else...

The Pull-Quote is trying to relate to the readers who might have got into trouble and so sweetening the relationship between the brand and the reader

Targets for next draft:

1, Maybe edit photo layout on page - to experiment
2, To add more blockbuster features to feature list
3  Is "specials" necessary?